many musseums charge for admission while others are free. do you think the advantages of charging people for admission to museums outwegiht the disadvantages?
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museums
are charging
entrance Wrong verb form
charge
fee
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fees
from
the visitors Change preposition
to
while
others are free. I definitely believe that charging people
for admission have
a lot of advantages especially to maintain certain important Correct subject-verb agreement
has
operation
in the Fix the agreement mistake
operations
museum
.
Museums
are one out of many public facilities that are vital to people
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people's
educations
, Fix the agreement mistake
education
although
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the goverment
goverment
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government
were
the only Wrong verb form
is
intitution
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institution
institutions
that
responsible Correct word choice
apply
to
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for
the
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apply
museum
operations
, to put all reliant to
a public institution Change preposition
on
in maintaining
the Change preposition
to maintain
operations
on
certain public facilities might be ended in sub-standard service quality. It is because most public Change preposition
of
intitutions
only provide Correct your spelling
institutions
limited
budget to spend in managing the operation of the Add an article
a limited
the limited
museum
while
most of their spending are
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is
focus
on other important issues Wrong verb form
focused
such
as healthcare and infrastructure. Therefore
museum
nowadays Fix the agreement mistake
museums
are
difficult to maintain certain Verb problem
find it
operations
such
as cleanliness and convenient
atmosphere.
Charging Correct article usage
a convenient
fare
to the Fix the agreement mistake
fares
visitiors
might Correct your spelling
visitors
be draw
many advantages for the Change the verb form
draw
museum
operations
. This
means that museum
is not put all Correct article usage
the museum
its
reliant Correct pronoun usage
apply
to
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on
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the goverment
goverment
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government
body
because Fix the agreement mistake
bodies
it
can provide Correct pronoun usage
they
itself
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themselves
with
the income they get from the visitors. Change preposition
apply
Moreover
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Moreover,
this
policy would make museum
management more independent and creative especially
in promoting certain events or Add the comma(s)
, especially
to provide
Change the verb form
providing
people
with value added service
that Fix the agreement mistake
services
beneficial
for them Add a missing verb
are beneficial
for example
provide
historical story in complement with new technology to create Wrong verb form
providing
more
interactive and fun experience. Add an article
a more
At the end
of the day people
will grow interest
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interested
to visit
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in visiting
museum
which provides such
services and Correct article usage
the museum
museum
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museums
would be benefited
in return.
In my conclusion, Wrong verb form
will benefit
i
definitely believe that charging visitors fees would help Change the capitalization
I
museums
in maintaining or rather improve many services that beneficial
and needed by the community. Add a missing verb
are beneficial
Although
that policy is beneficial, museums
have to pay attention in
pricing strategy so that it Change preposition
to
really
connected with the goals and not the other way around.Add a missing verb
is really
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