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You travelled by plane last week and your suitcase was lost. You have still heard nothing from the airline company. Write to the airline and explain what happened. Describe your suitcase and tell them what was in it. Find out what they are going to do about it. You should write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses.

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Dear Sir/Madam, I hope you are doing well. I am writing
this
 letter in regard to the suitcase which I lost
while
 travelling on your flight
last
 week. Let me describe the situation
first,
last
 week I travelled from Vancouver to Calgary on flight number A55 in the evening. I was extremely tired because of my restless journey
due to
 the attitude of a passenger in my next seat who was fully drunk. So, when I heard the announcement of flight arrival, I left my seat without picking up my second
bag
 from the above cabinet. But I realized about
this
 missing
bag
 when I reached my home. About the
bag
, my suitcase is in brown colour and it has a small flower print on the bottom.
Besides
 that, I bought
this
bag
 from Aldo
last
 year and because of that it is still in good condition. When you open
this
bag
, you will see some books as I love reading books
as well as
 some clothes
such
 as jeans and tops etc. I just have one request, could you please find
this
bag
 as soon as possible, since I need all the books in an emergency, not because I want to read them all, in fact, the return date is too close. Even though I am fully ready to pick up my
bag
 any time, just email me at arsh@gmail. I hope you will understand my situation and give priority to
this
 task. Waiting to hear back from you Yours faithfully Arshdeek Kaur
Submitted by arshkaurbrar on

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task achievement
Make sure to proofread your writing to catch any minor errors, such as 'I realized about this missing bag' which should be 'I realized this bag was missing'.
coherence cohesion
Consider breaking down the paragraph where you describe both the situation and the bag into two separate paragraphs. This can help make your letter clearer and more organized.
task achievement
The situation is clearly described, making it easy for the airline to understand what happened.
coherence cohesion
The letter follows a logical structure with a clear introduction, explanation of the situation, description of the suitcase, and a request for action.
task achievement
The tone of the letter is polite and appropriate for formal communication.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing of the letter are appropriate, maintaining the formal tone throughout.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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