the diagram below shows how a refrigerator works.

the diagram below shows how a refrigerator works.
The diagram below illustrates how a refrigerator works.
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, as we can see, there is a high-pressure liquid evaporator
that
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located in the refrigerator. There are 4 steps, how heat from food goes through the evaporator. In
this
process, heat from food goes through the big
tube
to warm a
low pressure
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gas
. The
low pressured
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gas
is gone through, by the compressor to be compressed. After being compressed, we take hot high-pressure
gas
from
low pressure
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gas
. The heat of the
gas
is transferred to
atmosphere
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. Other
gas
that has been left, goes through the long
tube
called
condenser
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.
Then
gas
goes from the ordinary
tube
to the smaller
tube
, that has known as
capillary
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tube
. After all that step the process will be repeated again and again.
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