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Chorleywood is a village near London whose population has increased steadily since the middle of the nineteenth century. The map below shows the development of the village. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the development of the village.

Chorleywood is a village near London whose population has increased steadily since the middle of the nineteenth century. The map below shows the development of the village. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the development of the village.
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The map given illustrates how the developments of Chorleywood
village
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 in London took place from 1868 to 1994, over a period of 125 years.
Overall
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, the
development
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 of works in
this
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 rural
area
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 proceeded much
rapidly
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more rapidly
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 during the
last
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 year compared to previous decades. Looking at the map in more detail, at the beginning of the period, improvement in the
village
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 was limited. It can be seen that only the
area
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that is
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 located close to the station witnessed some
development
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 of works,
however
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, there was just the main road which had been constructed in the
village
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. The motorway was built in 1970 and it connected to the main road in the east of the Chorleywood
area
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.
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, at the same time between 1922 and 1970, there was a huge establishment in the southwest of the
village
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. It is worth noticing that
development
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 was focused in the western part only until 1970.
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, in the
last
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 period, the
village
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 went through a large-scale progress in the eastern part, which has been
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an undeveloped
area
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 for over a century. The railway was constructed in 1909
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across the station
area
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 followed by a wider
development
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 that happened alongside the railway and main road.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further, last".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words village, development, area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • village
  • population
  • increased steadily
  • middle of the nineteenth century
  • development
  • location
  • factors
  • contributing
  • physical
  • infrastructural
  • effects
  • conclusion
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