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You are studying English at the private language school attended by many international students. You are planning a surprise birthday party for a friend who has been feeling particularly sad and homesick. Write to another classmate and invite him/her to the party.In your letter: Explain the reason for the party Give the data and time of the party Suggest what the classmate could being to the party

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Dear Valery, What's cooking, good looking? Oh my darling, how are you doing , I hope you are well as always. I had the hardest time to
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this
 letter. You know our friend Alex from Paris
in
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 a bad mood he missed his family but the reason for
that is
 some vandals messed up his favourite fluffy dog. We're trying to give these wretches a chance but I reckon we will
gave
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 Alex some good mood with deal his birthday
one
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 top of the world. I know you master of understatement, as
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 but I like to make an impact.
This
 party will held in the big restaurant Fairy Tale
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 March 27 at night 20:00. I suppose
restaurant
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 would be
fine
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 place to celebrate
birthday
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a birthday
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 party.As a rule, It's a bit early to be thinking about organisations of different singers and famous
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 but that will be decided later. That's sound odd but I know you are not
grubby
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 girl. You
coul
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could
 draw a portrait of Alex I know you are very good at
this
 your
drawing
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 are quite fabulous nothing
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 of that! I wish you all the best. See you soon! Warm wishes, Arthur
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Greeting and Introduction
Begin with a clear greeting and concise introduction of the letter's purpose. Avoid colloquial expressions that might not be understood in a formal context.
Task Achievement
For task response, ensure you answer all parts of the question directly and clearly. Explicitly mention the surprise birthday party, the reason for it, and how the classmate can contribute.
Coherence and Cohesion
Use paragraphs effectively. Each paragraph should cover a single idea related to the party’s details, the invitation, and the request for contribution.
Tone and Style
Adopt a consistent and suitable tone throughout the letter. Avoid overly informal language and colloquialisms when writing for an academic or formal context.
Relevance and Clarity
Refrain from including unrelated or unclear information that does not directly support the letter's purpose. Focus on clarity and relevance to the task.

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