The table shows the number of mobile phones sold in millions for a period of six years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table shows the number of mobile phones sold in millions for a period of six years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table illustrates the sales of mobiles counted in millions from 2006 to 2012.
Overall
, except
Samsung
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and Apple, the sales rates declined by 2012 compared to 2006.
Samsumg
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Samsung
company were the leading
purchased
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compared to all others
while
Motorola and Ericsson were the lowest.
To begin
with, Ericsson increased greatly in 2007 reaching 102
million
, after that, it
was
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declined gradually till it reached only 28
million
. Motorola started with 210
million
the highest of all phones except Nokia but it was
also
decreasing steadily till it reached the same as Ericsson.
In addition
, Samsung experienced
the
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major advance out of all the four others reaching almost 400,000000 in 2006 competed by Nokia but it could not have reached it. Apple did not exist in 2006 but developed in 2007 started with the lowest buyers only 2.3
million
but continued growing to 135.8
million
in the
last
year.
Furthermore
, Nokia was the top in the beginning year with 345
million
then
started fluctuating in the coming years somewhere decreasing
then
increasing eventually reaching 335
million
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • annual sales
  • fluctuations
  • market saturation
  • technological advancements
  • consumer trends
  • brand dominance
  • growth trajectory
  • market share
  • innovations
  • peak sales
  • decline
  • stagnate
  • proliferate
  • exponential growth
  • market dynamics
  • forecast
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