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Do the advantages of government spending their money on college and university fees for student outweigh the disadvantage?

#government #money #college #university #fees #student
Working as a Product Lead (2 products, PLM Enovia and 1C ROM) and managing a department as part of a unit responsible for the architecture of the Production & Sourcing areas.
Implementation
 of projects aimed at increasing sales.
Development
 of SLA, SLO, SLI, analytical dashboards, architectural solutions,
conducting
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and conducting
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 research.
Development
 of
development
 strategies, roadmaps for product
development
, formation of product requirements and interaction with customers, assessment of the cost and duration of
work
, determination of the composition and capacity of
development
 teams, determination of needs for infrastructure and server capacity, budgeting, organization of
work
 between different departments within the framework of project
implementation
 and
implementation
 of architectural solutions. Team
development
 and use of production metrics
such
 as LeadTime, CycleTime, Velocity, TTM, MTBF,
MTTR
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and MTTR
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.
Work
 using Kanban and Scrum (combined with Waterfall when implementing projects). Results
:
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apply
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 increased productivity and business efficiency
due to
 automation, increased sales
as a result
 of the
implementation
 of projects to develop the functionality of information systems, increasing the efficiency of the
development
 team by reducing the number of support tasks, optimizing meetings,
improving
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and improving
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 the quality of analysis and
work
 planning.
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task response
Your essay does not address the given topic about the advantages and disadvantages of government spending on higher education fees. It's essential to closely read and adhere to the topic to ensure relevance in your response.
coherence and cohesion
There is a lack of clear organization in the essay. It is essential to structure your essay with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Each part should smoothly transition into the next for better coherence and cohesion.
task achievement
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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