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The chart below gives information about levels of education by age range in Glasgow in 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about levels of education by age range in Glasgow in 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given stack bar chart demonstrates the
people
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 educational level in Glasgow in 2010. It divided
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people
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in
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 5
aged
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 groups and gives the statistics of university degree holders, individuals who had finished the highschool, and
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those
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 who had not qualified by educational
levels
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level
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.
Additionaly
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, the rate of men to
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women
 has
reported
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 in two
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charts
in
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at
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 each educational level.
Overall
,
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 the data presented in
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 bar chart the portion of
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non-literacy
 or
low-litracy
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low-literacy
 was exactly
simillar
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similar
 among the
people
 who
was
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 under 50 and it
rise
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 up
after
this
 age in a way that 30 per cent of 50-75,and 72% of
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the elder
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 group had been not qualified. Graduate and post-graduate individuals in the first and third
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 was
simalarly
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similarly
 71%,
definitle
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definitely
 the
highshool
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highschool
high school
 certified
people
was
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were
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 the same at 20%. In the second
aged
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 bracket, academic degree holders comprise 76 per each
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people
,
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 with
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a secondery
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secondery
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secondary
 education diploma
were make
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 up 15% and unqualified
people
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consist
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per
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cent. The supplied pie charts show that 29% of
wemen
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women
 vs. 32% of men went to
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university in 2010 in Glasgow, 33 per cent of both genders finished their
highschool
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high school
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 and
finally
the
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35% of
male
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males
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,
8
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and 8
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% of
female
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females
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 didn't
qaulified
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qualified
 yet.
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