In many countries, traditional foods are being replaced by international fast foods. Many people think that it is good to eat traditional food while others believe that fast food is a good choice. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
It is
debatable
topic Correct article usage
a debatable
amoung
different parts of the globe that cultural meals are preferably Correct your spelling
among
more
good Correct quantifier usage
apply
to
compared with Change preposition
apply
junk
Correct article usage
a junk
diet
.However
,others who support says
that Correct subject-verb agreement
say
fast-
Correct your spelling
fast food
food
is equally
good choice.I opineAdd an article
an equally
,
Remove the comma
apply
traditional
Correct word choice
that traditional
food
is more nutritional and it
represents culture. Correct pronoun usage
apply
This
essay will discuss both views.
On the one hand,regional food
is not only not nutritional but also
it is the representation of the culture. Considering,this
sort of diet
exhibit
the local values and Correct subject-verb agreement
exhibits
taste
which is Fix the agreement mistake
tastes
staple
to the people living Fix the agreement mistake
staples
in particular
areas. Taking this
into account, in Rajasthan, India, majority
of Correct article usage
the majority
food
is prepared with millets and bajra which is cultivated locally as it supports the bodily requirements of the community. Therefore
, the
traditional Correct article usage
apply
food
holds its significance in comparison to globally open chain restaurants.
On the other hand
, the chain meals are definitely on tastier
side. Add an article
the tastier
Also
, this
type of diet
is leading to globalisation. For instance
, tourists do not have to suffer taste difference
Fix the agreement mistake
differences
while
on vacations as they can easily eat from food
chain restaurants throughout the place like subway
, Capitalize word
Subway
Although
despite being tasty and readily available in the market, this
diet
is expensive which means not everyone can afford
.
In conclusion, nowadays many Correct pronoun usage
afford it
group
are comparing traditional Change to a plural noun
groups
food
with fast food
. However
, I believe local
made Change the adjective
locally
food
is far
better choice because of Add an article
a far
the far
it's
nutritional value than fast good meals.Replace the word
its
Submitted by ramanpreetkaursetia on
Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.
Coherence and Cohesion
Make sure your essay has a clear introduction, logically structured body paragraphs, and a concise conclusion. Each paragraph should start with a clear topic sentence.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure each main point is supported by specific examples or explanations. Avoid general statements without concrete evidence.
Task Achievement
Address the prompt fully by discussing both views thoroughly and stating your own opinion clearly. Ensure your opinion is consistent throughout the essay.
Coherence and Cohesion
Use varied and precise vocabulary to express your ideas more effectively. Avoid repetition of words or phrases.
Coherence and Cohesion
Be mindful of grammar and punctuation. Errors in these areas can obscure meaning and distract from your message.
Word Count
IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.
A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.
Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.
