The maps below show the changes of a school from 1985 to present time.

The maps below show the changes of a school from 1985 to present time.
The maps provide information on how the school area has been transformed from 1985 to now.
Overall
, it can be seen that new
facilities
have been constructed to accommodate more students, which significantly narrowed the playing field.
Additionally
, the library has completely disappeared as new
facilities
(a computer room and new classrooms) have been constructed. In 1985 the school area was separated by a road reaching large playing fields. On the east side of the lane there was a two-storeyed building which accommodated classrooms, on the opposite side of it there was a car park and another building
also
functioning as a teaching space. Behind the classrooms, there was a huge library and an office building right after the entrance. These equipments made
possible
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it possible
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to teach 1500 students.
However
, in recent years significant changes enabled to
expand
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the
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of the
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capacity of the school up to 2300 students by extending the two-storeyed building with another floor and additional classroom
facilities
. The library was completely demolished,
instead
, a new computer room has been established as a learning centre. Since new
sport
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sports
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facilities
including a pool and a fitness centre have been constructed the territory of the playground
became
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has become
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smaller. The middle road which has been substituted with trees yielded a narrow car park.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words facilities with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Layout
  • Significance
  • Accessibility
  • Expansion
  • Facilities
  • Trends
  • Priorities
  • Modernized
  • Well-being
  • Sustainability
  • Transportation
  • Innovative
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