Some people think that schools are no longer necessary because people can acquire information on the internet.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some
people
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argue that education centres are not necessary at all because many individuals gain
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all
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knowledge
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their knowledge
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by searching on the
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internet
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.From my point of view,I completely disagree with
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idea. First of all one of the main reasons for
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argument
,
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is,significant
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the significant
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significant
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and value of educational centres like schools,institutions,
universities
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and universities
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.
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educational centres improve and help
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peopleʼs
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people
background
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knowledge
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.An educated person has a strong view
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science.
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knowledgeable person
give
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knowledge
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to
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children
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students
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and students
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.But
on
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the
internet
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has no these kinds of choices.
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,
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on
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the
internet
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has
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a
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full
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untruth
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information
informations
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information
.Despite all the different kinds of information and data on the
internet
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,these
imporatant
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important
activities cannot be found on the
internet
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sites.
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for
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argument,some online
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information
pieces of information
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not suitable for children who study at school.
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,online sites like social programmes do not have
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enough available resources.
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is one of the important online data
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cause some problems.
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,
people
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can get bored if they always
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learning
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by
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internet
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.
Furthmore
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Furthermore
,some websites are managed by illiterate
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without any professional education.These can be more difficult
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readers.
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as
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medical science can be shared
knowledge
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by professional
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.If more important subjects and professions are not taught by a professional professor,
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,these situations increase of illiterate
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in many countries.
To conclude
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,I totally disagree with
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idea that learn on the
internet
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.In my opinion,
learn
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learning
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knowledge
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at schools,
universities
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and universities
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by
the
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apply
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professors
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many
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advantageous than
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learning
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on the
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.
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task achievement
Ensure you fully address the prompt by discussing both sides of the argument for a more balanced approach, even if you choose to strongly agree or disagree.
coherence cohesion
Organize your essay with a clear introduction, body paragraphs focusing on individual arguments, and a concise conclusion to enhance the logical flow and clarity.
task achievement
Support your main points with specific examples and reasons. Avoid general statements to make your argument more persuasive and engaging.
coherence cohesion
Work on grammatical accuracy and range of vocabulary. Frequent grammatical errors and limited vocabulary range can distract from the clarity and quality of the response.

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