Some people think that schools are no longer necessary because people can acquire information on the internet.To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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information
informations
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task achievement
Ensure you fully address the prompt by discussing both sides of the argument for a more balanced approach, even if you choose to strongly agree or disagree.
coherence cohesion
Organize your essay with a clear introduction, body paragraphs focusing on individual arguments, and a concise conclusion to enhance the logical flow and clarity.
task achievement
Support your main points with specific examples and reasons. Avoid general statements to make your argument more persuasive and engaging.
coherence cohesion
Work on grammatical accuracy and range of vocabulary. Frequent grammatical errors and limited vocabulary range can distract from the clarity and quality of the response.
Word Count
IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.
A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.
Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.