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Writing Samples
Band 8

You have some library books that you are unable to return as a member of your family in another city has fallen sick and you have had to go and look after them. Write a letter to the library . In your letter you should * Explain the situation * Apologize for the inconvenience called * And say what you are going to do. You should write at least 150 words.

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Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing in order to inform you about the books I have borrowed from the library two weeks ago. The return deadline is tomorrow ( the 12th of March) but, I am afraid that I will not be able to deliver it
due to
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 my sister's sickness. As she is not living in the same city and no one is accompanying her at the moment
also
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 she has been hospitalized so far unattended.
Therefore
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, I must refer to taking care of her and her insurance and hospital expenses. I deeply apologize for the inconvenience I caused and it is worth saying that I have never been late for the return of the books till now. Coming back I promise I will bring back the borrowed books as soon as possible. Once again I am greatly sorry for
this
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 and I hope that it will not change your mind about my punctuality in the future. faithfully yours Afzal

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Coherence and Cohesion
Try to provide a clearer logical structure to your letter by organizing your ideas into distinct paragraphs: one for the introduction and explanation, one for your apology, and another for your proposed solution or action.
Coherence and Cohesion
Use varied sentence structures and linking words to enhance the flow and coherence of your paragraphs.
Task Achievement
Make sure your letter covers all aspects of the task by clearly explaining your situation, offering a sincere apology, and detailing your plan to resolve the issue. You've done this well, but more specific details on how you plan to return the books or any potential compensation could further improve your response.
Task Achievement
Consider using more formal closings in formal letters. While "faithfully yours" is acceptable, alternatives like "Yours faithfully" are more conventionally used.
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