Many countries have embraced tourism as a way to boost their economies and create jobs for local residents. However, some argue that tourism can have negative impacts on the environment and local cultures. What are advantages and disadvantages of tourism for a country.
Nowadays, many
countries
have embraced tourism
as a way raise
their economies and lucrative jobs for local Fix the infinitive
to raise
humans
but I think boost tourism
year by year.
Many countries
have a lot of tourism
and this
tourism
developing day by day and
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apply
also
government
believe Correct article usage
the government
tourism
give
benefits Change the verb form
gives
for
local residents.
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to
Moreover
, this
tourism
extremely
good for some Add a missing verb
is extremely
people
because many humans
might be occupied also
government
think should developing
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about developing
tourism
in the near future. Furthermore
, some visitors should come beautiful
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to beautiful
places
in my country. For instance
, this
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apply
tourism
very superb for local people
and government
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the government
humans give
better work and home for some Verb problem
provides
people
. I believe tourism
give
good benefits for Correct subject-verb agreement
gives
government
.
In my opinion many Correct article usage
the government
tourism
can have extremely
bad Add an article
an extremely
affect
on the Replace the word
effect
environment
and local cultures bacause
many Correct your spelling
because
humans
visit beautiful places
every year after
this
Correct determiner usage
these
places
there are would be a lot of garbage and this
rubbish give
Verb problem
has
negative
impact on the Correct article usage
a negative
environment
. So, I think tourism
should decrase
for stunning nature or Correct your spelling
decrease
government
humans
think different
ways for Change preposition
of different
tourism
. Besides
that, tourism
affect in the near future to many countries
. For example
, now tourism
extremely developing some
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in some
countries
and in my country
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country,
after
some Correct word choice
apply
people
visit different places
and this
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these
places
might be rubbish. Rubbish bad affect
on the Replace the word
effect
environment
and weather.
In conclusion, government
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the government
humans
must prevent beautiful nature and this
to
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apply
problem
should Add an article
the problem
a problem
be solve
for visitors. I think some Change the verb form
be solved
be solving
tourism
must decline for on the environment
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