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The map shows the development of the village of Rye mouth between 1995 and present. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The map shows the development of the village of Rye mouth between 1995 and present. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The two maps illustrate changes which took place in Rye
mouth
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Mouth
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 village between the years
of
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apply
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1995 and
present
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the present
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.
Overall
,
it is clear that
, Rye
mouth village
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Mouth Village
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 used to have an ordinary design with farmland,
forest
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a forest
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 park,
fishing
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a fishing
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 port and
shop
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a shop
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 which became more sophisticated in terms of entertainment with the facilities of
golf
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a golf
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 course, tennis court, apartments and restaurants.
According to
 the map, the farmland
in
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on
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 the northeast side of the map
demolished
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was demolished
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 and in its place golf course and tennis court were constructed. In 1995, there was not any car park and
present
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at present
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 we can see
car
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a car
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 park next to the hotel in the southeast. Another significant change is that, in the past, there were shops and now
instead
 of shops several restaurants have been built on the opposite side of the apartments where previously fish
market
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markets
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 were located. There is
also
 an increase in the total number of houses, from 12 in 1995 to 16 at present.
Finally
, the hotel and cafe in the southeast remained the same. (171 words)
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • development
  • transformation
  • residential areas
  • infrastructure
  • connectivity
  • commercial development
  • public services
  • green spaces
  • recreational areas
  • economic growth
  • lifestyle changes
  • quality of life
  • sustainability
  • layout
  • connectivity
  • impact
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