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The internet has vastly increased our access to information. To what extent do you think this is a good thing?

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The
internet
 is one of the most important discoveries of the century, which has considerably changed our way of life with full access to
information
.
Although
 I think the
Internet
 is useful, I believe that we need to be careful to not be obsessed or stressed by the immediacy of its results. On the one hand, access to wide
information
 is a real progress for all kinds of
people
 all over the world. Nowadays, we are able to know everything , in every country thanks to the
internet
 and new technology.
For instance
, most students can obtain all they need on their computer to do their homework or research for school because all the data are available on the network.
However
, 40 years ago, pupils needed lots of books to do the same work.
Moreover
,
people
 can do everything online as there are no borders anymore with the
internet
. We can shop, work,learn or even watch movies online at any
timewhich
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time which
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 represents a revolution in our everyday life.
On the other hand
, full access to
information
 can be dangerous.
As a result
, having non-stop news notifications on our mobile phones can make us obsessed and stressed.
Besides
, worldwide
information
 can bring fake news and it can damage the trust
people
 have in
this
 new tool.
Likewise
, gossip and rumours can hurt
people
's reputations and can have large consequences in their personal and professional lives.
For example
, the application Twitter is the new popular means of communication for personalities in which, many false facts are created and spread all over the world to make
people
 confused. In conclusion, I firmly believe that the
Internet
 is an essential means of
information
 and communication.
However
, I think that we need to be careful about what circulates on the network and that we have to keep a certain distance towards
this
 constant flow of disturbance.
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Task Response
To improve your Task Response, make sure to address the question directly and develop your arguments more fully. While you've provided a stance on the accessibility of information via the Internet, expanding on your points with more detailed examples or explanations will strengthen your argument.
Coherence and Cohesion
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