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The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given pie charts illustrate the ages and number of people in two countries,
Yeman
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Yemen
 and Italy in 2000 and anticipations for 2050.
Overall
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, in Yeman the
the
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apply
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individuals in
15
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the 15
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-59
age
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catagory
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category
is
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are
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 predicted to increase remarkably in 2050
while
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 the same is expected to happen in
over
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the over
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 60
age
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 group. In detail, in Yeman, in the
year
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 2000 majority , half of the population was represented by children of 14 years or less ,
and
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apply
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3.6%
tiny
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by tiny
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 minority by over
60
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60-year
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year
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 adults and the rest, 46.3% by the 15-59
age
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 category.
Whereas
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, the 15-59
year
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 category is predicted to increase by 10% in the
year
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 2050
while
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 the number in
0
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the 0
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-14
age
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 group will be reduced by 12.9% in 2050.
Furthermore
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, in Italy the overwhelming majority, 61.6% was recorded in the
year
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 2000 by the 15-59
age
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 group and it is projected to
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be recuced
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recuced
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reduced
reduce
 by 15.4% in 2050.
However
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,
nealy
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nearly
fifth
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a fifth
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 of
over
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the over
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60
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60-year
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year
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 population in the
year
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 2000 is estimated to increase by 18.2 % in the
yer
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year
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 2050.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • population distribution
  • age group
  • population pyramid
  • projections
  • young population
  • aging population
  • demographic shift
  • increase in elderly population
  • proportion
  • percentage
  • population dynamics
  • top-heavy
  • balanced age distribution
  • healthcare needs
  • pension provision
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