The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given pie charts illustrate the ages and number of people in two countries,
Yeman
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Yemen
and Italy in 2000 and anticipations for 2050.
Overall
, in Yeman the
the
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individuals in
15
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the 15
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-59
age
catagory
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category
is
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predicted to increase remarkably in 2050
while
the same is expected to happen in
over
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60
age
group. In detail, in Yeman, in the
year
2000 majority , half of the population was represented by children of 14 years or less ,
and
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3.6%
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minority by over
60
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year
adults and the rest, 46.3% by the 15-59
age
category.
Whereas
, the 15-59
year
category is predicted to increase by 10% in the
year
2050
while
the number in
0
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-14
age
group will be reduced by 12.9% in 2050.
Furthermore
, in Italy the overwhelming majority, 61.6% was recorded in the
year
2000 by the 15-59
age
group and it is projected to
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recuced
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reduced
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by 15.4% in 2050.
However
,
nealy
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nearly
fifth
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of
over
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the over
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60
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60-year
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year
population in the
year
2000 is estimated to increase by 18.2 % in the
yer
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year
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2050.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words age, year with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • population distribution
  • age group
  • population pyramid
  • projections
  • young population
  • aging population
  • demographic shift
  • increase in elderly population
  • proportion
  • percentage
  • population dynamics
  • top-heavy
  • balanced age distribution
  • healthcare needs
  • pension provision
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