Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this Statement.

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Introduction Improvement
Expand on your introduction by more clearly stating your viewpoint. Use a sentence or two to outline the main reasons for your stance, making it straightforward for the reader.
Task Response
When discussing your view, ensure you directly address the prompt. Your argument does not fully engage with the comparison between spending on railways versus roads. It primarily focuses on the importance of roads, lacking a balanced discussion.
Conclusion Improvement
Include a conclusion that summarises your main points and restates your opinion. This will help to round off your essay and provide closure to your argument.
Support Expansion
Work on providing specific examples and evidence to support your points. Rather than general statements about the importance of roads, mention statistics, studies, or specific examples that underscore your argument.
Paragraph Structure
Organize your essay into clear paragraphs, each centered on a single main idea. This organization will help in creating a logical flow and making your essay easier to follow.
Essay Structure
Make a clear distinction between your introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion. Each part serves a different purpose and should be clearly identifiable.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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  • Mass transportation
  • Traffic congestion
  • Economic growth
  • Regional development
  • Initial investment
  • Feasibility
  • Flexibility
  • Rural areas
  • Integration
  • Sustainable
  • Efficiency
  • Infrastructure
  • Commuters
  • Public expenditure
  • Autonomous vehicles
  • Long-term investment
  • Accessibility
  • Connectivity
  • Modal shift
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