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Costumers can buy products from all over the world. Is it negative or positive?

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In recent years it has become common for customers in many countries to visit supermarkets and purchase
food
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 items that are produced all over the world.
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 some people view that as a positive development, I don't think so, I believe it brings more negative consequences than benefits.
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 hand, the availability of global
food
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 products in supermarkets has made it easier for people to access a wide variety of
food
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, regardless of where they live.
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, a person who
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 in Kazakhstan can enjoy fruits from tropical regions like mangoes or bananas,
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 someone in Europe can purchase exotic or tropical beverages.
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 has enriched the culinary experience of many, providing greater diversity in diets.
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, it has supported international
trades
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 and the global economy by opening markets for producers worldwide. But
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,
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 development has several downsides.
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it has led to a rise in the carbon footprint, as many
food
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 items are transported across long distances. The environmental cost of shipping goods around the world contributes significantly to climate change.
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, local agriculture and
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 industries are often undermined. As important foods dominate supermarket shelves, local farmers may struggle to compete, which can result in the loss of traditional farming
process
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processes
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 and local production.
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, in some countries, local markets and small farms are disappearing because of the dominance of
mass produced
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 international foods. In conclusion,
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 global
food
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 distribution has made a wide variety of
food
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 available, the negative effects on the environment and local economies cannot be overlooked.
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, I believe
this
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 is largely a negative development.
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