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The chart below gives information about the number of social networking sites people used in Canada in 2014 and 2015.

The chart below gives information about the number of social networking sites people used in Canada in 2014 and 2015.
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The given bar chart illustrates the proportion of
people
 who use various
number
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 of social networking in Canada between 2014 and 2015. Units are measured in per cent.
Overall
, it can clearly be seen that the percentage of
people
 using multiple social networking
sites
have
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different
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 trend over one year.
Moreover
, the significant change is
people
 using one site social media that witnessed a dramatic fall. In terms of the
number
 of social networking that
people
 most used, one site
social
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 networking started at just above 35.
Thereafter
, the
number
 drastically
drop
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 to 28 in 2015.
Furthermore
, there are many
people
 who use two kinds of social media which stood at 23 in 2014,
then
 had a really slight increase to 24 in the next year. Regarding the other range of networking
sites
 that
people
 used, in 2014, there are 22
of
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people
 that did not active
in
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on
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 any
sites
although
 the
number
 went down by 1 in 2015.
However
, the
number
 of
people
 who use three, four, or even five
sites
increase
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increases
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 throughout the given period. The percentage
begin
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 at 12, 5, and 2 respectively in 2014 before growing in the next season.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, number, sites with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • chart overview
  • social networking sites
  • trends
  • adoption
  • comparison
  • significant changes
  • segment
  • growth or reduction
  • social media habits
  • patterns
  • multi-platform usage
  • decline
  • non-users
  • conclusion
  • digital communication
  • social media marketing
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