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the pie charts below show the percentage of five kinds of books sold by bookseller between 1972 and 2012

the pie charts below show the percentage of five kinds of books sold by bookseller between 1972 and 2012
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The pie charts detail sales by a bookseller between 1972 and 2012
according to
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 genre. Looking from an
overall
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 perspective, it is readily apparent that
adult
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fiction
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 became by far the most popular type at the expense of the genres which declined in popularity than
others
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,
biography
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, and
travel
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 . Interest in
children’s
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fiction
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also
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 increased. In 1972,
this
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 particular bookseller sold relatively equal proportions of each type with
others
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 leading at 25%, followed by
adult
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fiction
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,
children’s
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fiction
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, and
biography
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 all at 20%, and
travel
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 lowest at 15%. By 1992,
adult
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fiction
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 had risen by 5%,
while
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others
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 and
biography
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 declined by the same number.
Travel
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 and
children’s
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fiction
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 grew by 3% and 2%, respectively. In the final year surveyed,
adult
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fiction
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 surged to 45% and
children’s
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fiction
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 ticked up slightly to 25%. The rise of
adult
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fiction
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 was compensated for by dramatic drops for the remaining genres with
others
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 finishing at 12%,
travel
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 at 10%, and
biography
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 at 8%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words adult, fiction, others, biography, travel, children’s with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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