Adults do less exercise nowadays. Some people thi it that people can be encouraged to live healthy lives through sporting events such as Olympics and World cups. Others think that there are better ways to encourage adults to do exercise. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
It has been seen recently that more and more
adults
are walking away from doing physical activities. Now, the reason behind it could partially be that they are not being encouraged enough through sporting events
like the Olympics and World Cups, however
, it could also
be due to
the reason that they want an economically secure life and that is
why adults
are spending more time in getting jobs that pay huge salary, therefore
, sacrificing physical workouts and healthy lifestyle to achieve it. This
essay will discuss both sides and give an opinion in conclusion.
To begin
with, we see that people
idealize athletes and follow their advice as they are influenced by them. For example
, it was seen that a famous football player named "Ronaldo" replaced cold drinks with water that were
kept on his table during a press conference and told Change the verb form
was
people
through his act to have water instead
, the very next day the stock price of that brand suffered adversely due to
this
. Thus
, they can also
make people
do workouts and do more physical activities as adults
follow their saying.
On the other hand
, encouraging Olympics and sports activities will do no better if they are not doing better financially as the reality is people
want money more than a healthy lifestyle, so, they don't care if participants of Olympics and sports events
are suffering economically. I believe that the government should provide incentives and give rewards to the participants performing in such
events
. For example
, in India, government give jobs to those who win medals in games. So, it is important that adults
see the government appreciating athletes too along with
encouragement.
In conclusion, in my opinion, it is important that along with
these events
being advertised and encouraged, the participants should get incentives for their efforts so that it brings a positive impact on society and they will work hard like those athletes.Submitted by mannadarshpal13 on
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