Some people argue that all experimentation on animals is bad and should be outlawed. However, others believe that important scientific discoveries can be made from animal experiments. Can experimentation on animals be justified? Are there any alternatives?

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There is an ongoing controversy between scientific researchers and animal conservationists about the
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stage
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discoveries.
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some ethical and moral issues underlying animal
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, because of the lack of methods that scientists can
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them to not experiment on
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. First of all,
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experiments
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can be marked as a right action
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the medical field. Every new
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particular field should first pass the test on
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humans, in case
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adverse effects on
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body.
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program which is run by
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Health Organization. Very few adverse effects were caught after the vaccines
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people. The reason for
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of lab
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which included testing on wildlife.
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of each certified medicine followed the same path.
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, medicine companies will have the opportunity to change or restart their work, if they notice some error in their testing stage.
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not found any other way to replace the
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of wildlife. Albeit, there is
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chance for a technology to change the status in the future. Until
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the traditional way. In conclusion, there are rights
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experiments
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for now. Until we can replace the
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animals
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help, we should focus on improvements
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Consider a more nuanced argument. While supporting the use of animal testing, also address the ethical concerns and potential for harm, offering a balanced view.
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Provide specific examples to support your arguments. For instance, mention a particular vaccine that went through animal testing, detailing the process and outcomes.
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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
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  • to give a clear example
  • such as
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • scientific breakthroughs
  • ethical concerns
  • alternatives
  • animal testing
  • moral implications
  • ethical considerations
  • vivisection
  • research methods
  • ethical dilemmas
  • animal welfare
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