The maps below show the changes that have taken place in the seaside resort of Templeton between 1990 and 2005.

The maps below show the changes that have taken place in the seaside resort of Templeton between 1990 and 2005.
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The maps below illustrate the modifications that have happened in the seaside resort of Templeton from 1990 to 2005.
It is clear that
there are significant changes including recreational facilities, accommodation and
railway
. In 1990, in the northwest and southwest of the
city
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city,
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there were residential areas with lots of trees.
Also
, in the middle of the resort, there was a wide road which accessed from north to the sea. In the northwest of the map, there was a health
center
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and education place with some houses near them.
Also
right behind them
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,
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there was a
railway
station. 15 years later in 2005, in the southeast of the seaside, the houses were demolished and new buildings were constructed
as well as
new
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series
supermarkets
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.
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, in the middle of the resort green space was knocked down and four houses were made. In the north of the
map
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map,
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trees were chopped and three buildings were replaced. Alongside the sea new
railway
was built and in the west of the
railway
new ferry was developed.
Also
,the forest was demolished
and
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the factory was renovated as well a new airport was constructed near the school.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Vocabulary: Replace the words railway with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
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