The map illustrates the between and predicted future Islip town centre.
The maps show the present condition of Islip town centre which is planned to be developed in the future. It is clear from the graph that , there will be the construction of a divided highway and new housing. Several facilities will be built,
such
as a bus station, shopping centre and car park
.
According to
what is shown, a Dual carriageway will be constructed in the future surrounding the area. The town will have a pedestrian area which currently functions as the main road. Shops area and countryside in the north will redeveloped into a bus station, shopping centre, car park
and new housing. The new housing in the north will be connected with a road from the east.
To sum up
, we could say that, The housing in the middle and south areas will be separated by a dual highway. Currently, the park
is bigger than the future planned and will be passed by the dual carriageway on the east side. The new housing will be built on the west side of the park
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