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Many students now work whilst they are studying in college or university. This often results in them having less time to concentrate on their as well as feeling under pressure. what are some of the causes of this? what solutions could you suggest?

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Education, especially long-term courses or
studies
 at prestigious universities can be very costly. To still be able to study, a lot of young adults decide to find a part-time
job
. But often their
studies
 and quality of life suffer from the additional responsibility. Symptoms linked to stress and work overload are known medical problems among
students
. Multiple reasons might oblige a student to work
while
 studying. First of all, it is the simple lack of financial support from his family. It is true that really poor families will be supported by the government to be able to send their kids to university. But
this
 is often not the case with middle-class families. Yet, middle-class families do not necessarily have a lot of money to finance long
studies
. Another reason can be the choice of place. Some universities are better than others
,
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 but might be in a more expensive city or have higher fees. Some courses are indeed very long and it can be difficult for a family to finance long
studies
 especially when they have more than one child.
Finally
, finding a part-time
job
 can
also
 be the personal choice of a young adult seeking financial independence. As can be seen, the motivations are various.
However
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 there are solutions to help
students
 manage the combined burden of
studies
 and financial commitments. Scholarships are one of them. Another solution can be to offer
students
job
 possibilities in a field linked to their
studies
.
This
 will not only make them earn money but
also
 give them experiences useful for their
studies
 and exams. In a way, a student can work and learn at the same time. So it seems to me that the reasons to take a part-time
job
 are diverse, inevitable and often fully understandable. I think solutions –
such
 as scholarships and intelligent and qualifying
job
 possibilities – should be implemented by universities in order to help the
students
 and to increase the quality of education.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial independence
  • employability
  • time management
  • academic performance
  • flexible scheduling
  • financial aid
  • scholarship opportunities
  • internship programs
  • on-campus job opportunities
  • stress relief
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