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rovided diagrams illustrate information on the location options and the design of a wave-energy machine.

rovided diagrams illustrate information on the location options and the design of a wave-energy machine.
the given diagrams depict some selections of locations alongside the design of
machines
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 making energy by wave.
overall
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, inside a
wave-energy
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machine
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, there is a complex sequence, commencing with the wave directly going into the
machine
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 before motivating the turbine by the propulsion of wind
as well as
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 the pressure of water levels.
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, locating the
wave-energy
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machines
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 is capable of having some impact on their quality. looking at the design diagram, where the wave has a tendency to go into the lower vat of the
machine
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 in order to increase its water levels. In
this
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 way, the pressure in
this
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 vat will flow turbine in the higher tank so as to make the generator spin and create electricity. As soon as the internal air flows out of the
machine
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 by a direction pole, the external air will follow another one to go into the
machine
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 to avoid the case of overpressure. taking a look at the location options of
wave-energy
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machines
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, if the
machine
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 is put in the lower topographic of water levels, it will cost more money to install in order to create a higher and larger output. meanwhile, when the
wave-energy
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machines
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 are located in higher places, they will cost less money to design and build them up which leads to the smaller
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 lower output.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words machines, wave-energy, machine with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagrams" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "wave" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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