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What are the advantages and disadvantages of leaving your country to live or study abroad?

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Today, many young people want to live abroad to get a good education or a well-paid job. Moving to a more promising
country
 will bring new opportunities, but there will
also
 be difficulties.
An absolute
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 advantage is that if you move to a more developed
country
 you can get a quality education as you will be able to interact with
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 professionals
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 if you move to look for a job you will have better working conditions
as well as
 a higher salary. Another reason to live abroad is that you can take advantage of all the benefits
such
 as a good social package, quality medical care and other benefits that the new
country
 offers that your home
country
 does not. You may
also
 be able to gain citizenship after a period of time, which will increase your opportunities.
On the other hand
, you may have problems adjusting to a new society and culture; some people find it difficult to adapt to the traditions and daily routines of another
country
, so it will take some time.
Also
, in many
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 there are large numbers of people from other cultures, which makes it very difficult to find low-skilled work, so if you want to move to another
country
 for work, you need to get good qualifications in your home
country
 to avoid problems with employment. In conclusion, there are many opportunities after moving abroad, but you must be prepared for the first time to be quite difficult. Once you have a good education and a good job, your life will improve.
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To improve task response, ensure that your arguments comprehensively cover both the advantages and disadvantages of the topic at hand. Try to provide more specific examples and detailed explanations to make your points more vivid and persuasive.
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For better coherence and cohesion, work on linking your ideas more smoothly. Use transition words and phrases to connect your sentences and paragraphs seamlessly. This will help guide the reader through your thoughts more fluidly.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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