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Nowadays, not enough students choose science subject in university in many countries. What are the reasons of this problem? What are the effects on the society?

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In the modern era, a
number
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 of global
students
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 prefer to choose non-
science
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 fields more than
science
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 subjects. There are some reasons for
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 phenomenon and it impacts the future of society.
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about
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it.
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 with, the perception of
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 as a difficult field decreases
students
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’ interest in learning about it. The existence of perception is because of little exposure to understanding
science
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 which becomes difficult to apply in daily life contributes to
students
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 choosing another subject. Afterwards, there is limited access to
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education
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science
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 with good quality. The low quality is represented by insufficient methods, resources, and teachers of
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 decreasing the opportunity
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students
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 to pursue their studies in a
science
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 subject. The
problems
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 of rare
students
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 in many countries learning subjects related to
science
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leading
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 a serious effect on society in the future. There is a lack of professionals in
science
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 fields because of a low
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 of graduates with
science
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 as a background education. The country
also
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 has difficulty
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tackling the
problems
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 and challenges of global and national issues related to
science
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,
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 as climate change,
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, environmental issues and many more. In conclusion, the reasons
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low
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a low
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number
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 of
science
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student
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students
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 because the idea of heavy learning about
science
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 subjects and the low quality of
science
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 education represented by there are limited resources, methods and teachers in
science
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 fields.
This
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 phenomenon leads to
problems
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 in the future,
such
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 as a low
number
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 of
science
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 professionals and many
problems
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 related to
science
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,
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such
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 as climate change,
pandemic
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pandemics
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 and many more that are hard to tackle by countries.
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