The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
The bar chart illustrates the proportion of Australian
coffee
and
tea
consumption and purchasing in five different cities (Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane, Adelaide and Hobart) in Australia.
Overall
,
it is clear that
the percentage of people who went to a café for
coffee
and
tea
in the
last
month was higher than buying
tea
or
coffee
in four cities.
However
, the figures for buying instant
coffee
and going to a café were nearly equal in Adelaide during the same time.
Furthermore
, the popularity of going to a café in Melbourne was the highest among other cities. It can be seen that, in Melbourne, the consumption of
coffee
and
tea
in a café was the largest at approximately 64%.
Moreover
, in Brisbane, the proportion of buying instant
coffee
and that of going to a café was equal to 50%.
Finally
, the figures for purchasing fresh
coffee
in Brisbane were equal to that of Adelaide at 34%.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, tea, café with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • survey results
  • coffee and tea buying habits
  • instant coffee
  • fresh coffee
  • cafe culture
  • social influences
  • economic factors
  • city demographics
  • seasonal trends
  • marketing strategies
  • consumer preferences
  • availability
  • popularity
  • consumption patterns
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