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The diagram below explains how cotton is processed for personal and industrial use.

The diagram below explains how cotton is processed for personal and industrial use.
It is
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 a pleasure for me to summarize the information and make relevant comparisons. Cotton is an important element in life. I am going to recap the steps, the cotton is harvested, they separate the seed with the
fibers
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 using a machine,
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 they take the
fiber
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 and place it
to
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 a sticker, they twist the
fibers
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 together to make it stronger,
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then
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and then
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 one can decide to use it for different purposes. Some people use it for weaving or knitting. As you can see, process 3 is similar to process 4 but all the steps have only one purpose to have a final product.

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