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The graph below shows the number of tourists of visiting a particular Carribean Island between 2010 and 2017. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists of visiting a particular Carribean Island between 2010 and 2017. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph below illustrates the
amount
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number
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 of
tourists
 who went to
Caribbean
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the Caribbean
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island
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islands
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 from 2010 to 2017.
Overall
,
tourists
prefered
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preferred
 more to stay on
island
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the island
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 than stay on
cruise
ships
 in the
beggining
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beginning
.
However
, later it became the opposite and people began to choose
cruise
ships
 more. Looking at the graph, we can see that the number of
tourists
 on
cruise
ships
 fluctuated between 2010 and 2012.
Because since
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Since
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 2010 people on cruises
have
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has
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 increased by a
quater
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quarter
 of a
million
, but after 2011 the number of stays has decreased. Despite
this
 after 2012 staying on
cruise
ships
 increased until 2017 and it was around one and a half
million
 visitors.
Tourists
 staying on
island
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the island
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 had
a
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apply
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stability from 2010 to 2011. It amounted to about
tree
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three
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 quarters of a
million
. After that, the number of
tourists
 increased to one and a half
million
 in 2013 and it was unchanged until 2015 again.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tourists, cruise, ships, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 3 times.
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