The charts below show how the global water resources are distributed

The charts below show how the global water resources are distributed
The two pie charts provide information about the available
water
(oceans and freshwater),
as well as
the proportion of freshwater supply.
Additionally
, the bar graph shows the distribution of renewable freshwater across different continents all over the world, and the numbers are measured in cubic
kilometers
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(km3). In general, the largest portion of
water
recourse is occupied by freshwater,
furthermore
, glaciers and ice caps supply comprise almost two-thirds of total
water
supply. In regard to freshwater supply, South America provides the most significant number
whereas
Oceania has the least supply. To start, oceans only provide 3%, whilst the remaining resources are produced from freshwater (97%).
Following
this
, the freshwater is mainly made of glaciers and ice caps supply (68.70%),
in
contrast
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renewable freshwater
such
as lakes, rivers and others present the least supply (1.20%).
Ground
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Groundwater
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water
,
however
, contributes slightly more than a quarter of
total
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freshwater supply (30.10%).
On the other hand
, South America which is followed by Asia comes up with the most remarkable number of total freshwater supply (around 16000 and 15000 respectively). In comparison, three regions of North America, Europe and Africa contribute a similar share between 5000 and 10000.
Lastly
, around 1000% of
freshwater
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the freshwater
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supply is obtained from Oceania
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