The charts below show how global water resources are distributed

The charts below show how global water resources are distributed
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The charts describe the distribution of water resources across the globe. All in all,
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our global community has been trying to deal with the scarcity of freshwater, the availability of renewable freshwater between continents shows a huge gap, which is that South America has become the biggest supplier of renewable freshwater,
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Oceania is the converse.
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, freshwater accounts for only three
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of the global water resource, with the oceans providing the remaining portion.
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, one of the solutions to freshwater's problems, namely, renewable freshwater (
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, lakes, rivers, and
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surface freshwater), shares only around one
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of the total freshwater supply,
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the majority of it has been contributed by glaciers and ice cabs
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groundwater, which share 68.70
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and 30.10
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, respectively.
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, South America and Asia have become the biggest suppliers of renewable freshwater energy, contributing around 17,000 and 15,000 km3, respectively. On a different angle, Africa and Oceania considerably show a significant gap, representing only one-third and one-eighth of South America's share, respectively.
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