The pie charts below show the devices people in the 18 to 25 age group use to watch television in Canada in two different years

The pie charts below show the devices people in the 18 to 25 age group use to watch television in Canada in two different years
The pie charts illustrate the devices people in the 18 to 25 age range used to watch television in Canada in two different years (2009-2019).
Overall
, conventional
TV
was the main device
use
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in the first
year
,
while
the flat screen was the highest in the second
year
.
Moreover
,
tablet
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the tablet
a tablet
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was the lowest used device in 2009 ,
whereas
in the second
year
, conventional
TV
was the least
prefered
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preferred
device
. .
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.
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The percentage of conventional
TV
recorded in Canada by youths made up just over a third (34%) in 2009 and
this
then
declined to just 4% in 2019.
Similarly
, laptops accounted for one-fifth in the first
year
after which it fell to 12% in the second
year
.
Also
, the desktop showed a downward trend
form
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one-fifth to 12% after a decade.
On the other hand
, mobile phones recorded less than a fifth in 2009 before they went up to just over the quarter.
Likewise
, flat screen
TV
was (8%), and
then
it increased by 19% . Ultimately, tablets recorded (5%) in the first
year
, and it rose by 14
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pie charts
  • 18 to 25 age group
  • devices
  • watch television
  • Canada
  • comparison
  • shift
  • preferences
  • mobile devices
  • traditional televisions
  • technological advancements
  • television viewing habits
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