The charts below show the total number of students who studied English in Vietnam from 2015 to 2018, and their purposes of learning English. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features , and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the total number of students who studied English in Vietnam from 2015 to 2018, and their purposes of learning English.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features , and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph below gives information about the figures of students
learned
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English
along
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with
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the pie chart illustrates the percentage of purposes in Vietnam between 2015 and 2018.
It is clear that
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the number of every age
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group
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shows
a
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increase, except the
35
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35-year-old
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old group.
Moreover
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, in
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chart, the main target
studying
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for studying
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English was
aboard
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abroad
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education. In the bar graph, in 2015, the range of 13-16
years
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old, 17-24, 25-34 and 35+ launched with 0.1, 9, 2 and 3 respectively. In the next 2
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, in 2017,
while
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17
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the 17
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-24
ages
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group boomed more than double from 8 to 20 and
the
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a
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similar trend
occured
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occurred
in
13
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the 13
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-16 and 25-34
years
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old
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with a small jump, the 35+
ages
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group
stayed
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remain
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after a decrease. In
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the finally
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finally
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year
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of research, in 2018, the 17-24
years
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old peaked at 40, which was the highest,
following
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was 13-16
years
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old with
not
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no
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change
along with
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8 in 25-34
years
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old and 5 in 35+. In
pie
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charts, the main aim accounted for 58
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percent
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per cent
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belonged
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belonging
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to overseas education, the lower had school graduation at 23
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percent
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per cent
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and immigration at 19
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percent
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per cent
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. In 2018, the proportion of aboard
study
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studies
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continued the largest in sprite of
a
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narrow
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narrowing
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down
43
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to 43
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percent
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per cent
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.
Whereas
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the school graduation dropped 7
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percent
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per cent
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, the
remain
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remaining
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insteaded
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instead
of
schook oppoturnities
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school opportunities
with 6
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percent
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per cent
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. Work
oppoturnities
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opportunities
was
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emerged and became
the
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second at 25
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percent
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per cent
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "along with".
Vocabulary: Replace the words years, percent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend analysis
  • increases/decreases
  • categorizing
  • professional development
  • academic studies
  • migration/emigration
  • leisure/personal interest
  • popularity
  • shifts in trends
  • emerging patterns
  • correlation
  • motivations
  • implications
  • language education
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