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The map below shows three possible locations for a leisure center. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below shows three possible locations for a leisure center. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The map shows three proposed locations for a leisure
center
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centre
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.
Overall
, we can see that
their
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there
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is
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are
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 three different types of environment that
located
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are located
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 outside the city. In A
section
 we see factories and B
section
 is housing and the
last
 one
C
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in C
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section
 is woodland. The first potential location is A
section
 which
produce
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produces
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 factories.
This
 very
essential
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an essential
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 industrial area but it can affect
to
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apply
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the air
polution
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pollution
 and
to
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apply
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the woodland which is on
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the oppsite
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oppsite
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opposite
 side. We can
also
 see the main road to get to housing and industrial
area
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areas
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.
Secondly
, if we take a look
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at
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to
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at
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the B
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B
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the B
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section
 where
is
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the is
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 located housing and the river
which flowing
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flows
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into
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to
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into
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the C
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C
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the C
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section
.
Furthermore
,
B
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the B
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section
 is more convenient
to
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for
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 people
for living
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to live
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. 
In contrast
, looking for
C
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the C
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section
 there
demonstrate
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is
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 a woodland with a huge amount of space. Where we can cut down the trees and expand the area
such
 as
suprmarket
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supermarket
supermarkets
, parking and etc.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words section with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • amenities
  • accessibility
  • prospective
  • recreational facilities
  • infrastructure
  • proximity
  • pedestrian access
  • public transport links
  • green spaces
  • commercial area
  • residential zone
  • traffic congestion
  • environmental impact
  • urban planning
  • feasibility
  • demographics
  • footfall
  • zoning regulations
  • land use
  • catchment area
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