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Some people are fond of buying new gadgets phones or laptop is this a good or bad thing discuss your opinion

#people #gadgets #phones #laptop
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We live in a digital era, in which people constantly strive towards newer
products
 and improved versions of
gadgets
, to better their performance in a certain skill or for the sake of a more immersive digital experience.
Although
gadgets
 have their merits and are a common interest to many residents of
this
 planet, I am inclined to discourage excessive production and subsequent buying of digital
products
such
 as
gadgets
, phones and laptops. In my opinion, we as a community alarmingly began relying on digital help in many facets of our lives. Of course, we cannot live without certain technological
products
such
 as phones and laptops in today's digital age, but we should learn where to draw the line. As far as I am concerned, the more technology develops and the more
gadgets
 are created with the intention to make our work easier, or even replace it, the less capable we are becoming in completing the same tasks.
That is
due to
 the fact that ever so often ,we let digital creation do something for us and the more it impresses us with its result, the less we are inclined to ever do
such
 a job on our own. Even though I do see the merits of using technology in order to speed up certain tedious processes, I believe that transferring our tasks and jobs to digital programs has gotten out of hand, made us lazier and put us at risk of losing our abilities and downgrade the quality of our independent work.
Secondly
, the production of these
products
,
as well as
 the disposal of old
products
 can cause a great deal of damage to our planet.
Products
 are coming out quicker than before and people are getting greadier and greadier,
while
 no one stops to think of the recycling process and duration of these materials.
Additionally
, there are many countries in which even basic recycling systems do not exist, let alone solutions for electronic waste management, which must make a great fraction of trash on the planet.
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Consider offering specific examples to substantiate your claims. Detailed instances enhance your argument's credibility and engage your reader more effectively.
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Strive to create a more nuanced discussion. While your overall position is clear, exploring both the negatives and positives in greater depth could provide a more balanced and comprehensive analysis.
coherence and cohesion
To improve coherence, ensure a smooth flow of ideas between paragraphs with more effective use of transitional phrases. This makes it easier for readers to follow your argument.
coherence and cohesion
Try to incorporate a conclusion that not only summarizes your main points but also offers a final, reflective thought or a call to action, to leave a lasting impression on the reader.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fond
  • Gadgets
  • Phones
  • Laptop
  • Advantages
  • Latest technology
  • Features
  • Improved performance
  • Functionality
  • Enhanced productivity
  • Convenience
  • Access
  • Innovative applications
  • User experience
  • Disadvantages
  • High cost
  • Financial implications
  • Environmental impact
  • E-waste
  • Rapid obsolescence
  • Dependency
  • Social disconnection
  • Addiction
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