The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparions where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparions where relevant.
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The line chart illustrates the number of shop closures and openings in a particular country from 2011 to 2018.
Overall
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, Despite some rises, both diagrams experienced an increase. At
first,
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the number of openings was more.
However
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, it was overtaken by closings
at the end
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of the period.
Initially
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, number of opening shops was 7000. After showing a decrease to 4000 in 2012, there was a steady rise to about 6000. The chart had decreased to 4000 by 2015 before it
leveled
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off over the following two years.
At the end
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of the period, there was a fall in 3000. The figure for closing shops stood at 5000 in the first year. There was a decline of 1000 in 2012 followed by a peak at 7000 in the next year. It decreased until 2015 and reached a low of approximately 800. It showed a rise of 400 over the next year and remained almost stable until 2018
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end".
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rises" was used 3 times.
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