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Band 7.5

It has been suggested that cars and public transport should be banned from city centres and only bicycles be allowed instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It has been recommended by some that
cars
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 and public transportation should be banned from urban centres. Alternatively, they propose that just bikes should be permitted in the area. In my opinion,
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 suggestion is not sustainable as it would not only make central urban zones less accessible for those who have limited motion but
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 would be laborious for those who use public
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 to move across the
city
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. Accessibility is one of the most vital aspects associated with a well-developed metropolitan area. With
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 in mind, when not allowing
cars
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 or public
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 in the
city
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's main location, the access of many
citizens
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 would be significantly limited.
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, individuals with disabilities or aged people who can’t move their legs properly or walk long distances
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 diseases would not be able to reach central facilities easily.
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, people with limited mobility may have difficulties riding bicycles,
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 alternative way of
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 would not be effective for those groups. Despite that banning
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 and public ways of transportation would help to ease traffic jams, a
city
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 centre is usually a key zone where public
transport
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 options are concentrated.
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 means that many
citizens
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 use public
transport
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 to move to different suburbs,
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 prohibiting
cars
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, buses, and trains, would make their lives harder.
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, in Sydney, a big metropolitan
city
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, people from different suburbs travel to the centre to access buses and trains to other parts of the
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 when travelling to university or work.
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 is planned to make
citizens
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' travel journeys around other parts of the
city
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 easy and efficient. In conclusion, I believe that not allowing
cars
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, trains, and buses in urban central zones, and permitting only bikes, is not an effective suggestion.
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 disagreement is because it would make
city
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 centres less accessible and public
transport
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 travel journeys more challenging for
citizens
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.

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Task Achievement
Work on integrating more diverse and specific examples to support your points. This will not only make your argument stronger but also more engaging for the reader.
Coherence and Cohesion
Consider varying your sentence structures and using a broader range of linking phrases to enhance flow and coherence.
Task Achievement
To elevate your essay further, try to explore the topic from multiple perspectives, not just the drawbacks, but also potential benefits, even if you disagree with the proposition. This can provide a more rounded argument.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • congestion
  • air pollution
  • sustainable
  • environmentally friendly
  • traffic
  • improve
  • viable
  • population
  • investment
  • infrastructure
  • policy
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