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The school library is seeking applicants for a job over summer break. Write a letter to the library’s manager, in your letter include: – A brief introduction of yourself – Your experience and relevant skills – Why you want the job

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Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing
this
 letter in connection with the vacancy opened at your school for a
library
 assistant. My name is Sandhya Thapa Magar, a resident of London, Ontario for the past three years. I am
also
 a scholar at Western University who is currently in year three of Computer Science and right now I am on my summer break.
While
 I was strolling around the area next to my house, I came across your school's bulletin board that has provided the details about job vacancies. I have previous experience of handling books and organising them which I got when I was volunteering at my university's
library
 for three months. During that volunteer time, I have learned essential skills
such
 as organizing
library
 resources, assisting patrons, maintaining collections, and managing information requests. As I am on my summer break, I would like to
get
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apply
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engage in experiences where I can nourish myself with new opportunities and endeavours working in different workplace settings. With
this
 enthusiasm, I think I could be a perfect candidate for your institution's
library
. I have
also
 attached my resume
along with
this
 letter. I hope to hear back from you soon. Thank you Yours Faithfully, Sandhya
Submitted by sandhyathapamagar854 on

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task achievement
Ensure that the letter remains concise while providing necessary information to maintain the reader's interest throughout.
coherence cohesion
Always double-check for any minor grammatical errors or awkward phrasing to improve clarity in the information you want to convey.
coherence cohesion
Greetings and closings were very appropriately used and formal, aligning well with the context of the letter.
coherence cohesion
Each paragraph contains a single clear idea, which helps in creating a coherent and easy-to-follow structure.
task achievement
The letter includes all necessary information: a brief introduction, relevant skills and experience, and the reason for wanting the job.
task achievement
The writing tone is polite and formal, which is appropriate for applying for a job position.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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