In many cities, an increasing number of people do not know their neighbors and there is a lack of a sense of community. What are the causes of this problem? How can it be solved?
These days, indifference about their
neighbours
in the city centre is one of the critical issues all over the world. To improve our socialise, we have to solve this
problem together. This
essay will attempt to identify problems and propose some applicable solutions to redress this
matter.
Broadly speaking, there are some main problems with this
issue. Firstly
, the main cause of this
issue is that we are living digital era. We always watch our smartphone whenever we walk so we can not notify our neighbours
. Secondly
, compared to the past, we have more wariness about our neighbours
. Because, sometimes we can face murder accidents between
our Change preposition
among
neighbours
due to
minor problems such
as floor noise, and smoking smell.
In terms of proposing some solution to this
apparent dilemma, the members of society and government should cooperate together to tackle this
problem. Firstly
, the government make diverse policies to encourage people
's socialise. For instance
, they make various clubs such
as sports, hiking, and walking pets. As a result
, people
can form a close rapport as having the same interests. A further
alternative to solve this
problem is that people
make a welcoming culture. In Korea, most people
do not greet their neighbours
whenever meeting at cafes, streets, or even lifts. So we have to motivate American small talk culture.
In conclusion, most people
occasionally ignore their regional neighbours
. Also
when this
behaviour is sustained, this
becomes more serious. However
, if we practice diverse ways could be sensibly and easily tackled.Submitted by wowoo04066 on
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