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You had borrowed a book from the public library however, when You reached home, you found that some important pages were torn away. Write a letter to the librarian explaining the situation. You should - Mention the book - Mention the pages - Suggest what can be done.

#book #library #home #pages #librarian #situation
Dear Sir or Madam How do you do? I am your customer. I bought a book from
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 library yesterday. The name was a book written by Mirach Chagri "Life begins from the place of defeat ". When I
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 home, I found that some important pages were torn away. Even the interesting pages were torn.
For example
: If you still find yourself after losing, it means that you have triumphed. Even if you lose, you will be the winner. After these words, there is no more.Please
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look out for books.
This
 is not only bad for society but
also
 bad for yourself. My advice to you is to check the books carefully before taking them to your library. Yours faithfully Xumora
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Task Achievement
Start by giving a clear introduction to your letter, stating the purpose of your writing in the first paragraph. This helps the reader understand your intent right away.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single idea. In your case, introducing the issue in one, discussing the missing pages in another, and concluding with a suggestion or a request can help improve coherence.
Coherence and Cohesion
Use appropriate sign-offs and openings based on the formality of the letter. 'Dear Sir/Madam' is a good start, but consider using 'Yours sincerely' or a similar formal closing.
Task Achievement
To achieve a higher task response score, it's important to be detailed and specific in your explanations. Mentioning specific pages and explaining why they are important would strengthen your letter.
Task Achievement
Improve the formal tone of your writing by avoiding colloquial expressions and maintaining a professional and respectful tone throughout the letter. Phrases like 'How do you do?' may not be appropriate in this context.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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