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The table below shows information about age, average income per person and population below poverty line in three states in USA.

The table below shows information about age, average income per person and population below poverty line in three states in USA.
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The given table illustrates information about two different age groups , average
income
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 per person and the population
proportion
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 under the poverty line in
California
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,
Utah
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 and
Florida
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.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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Utah
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 has the smallest number of
people
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 over 60 years old, and
also
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 has the largest
proportion
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 of young
people
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 under 18 in three states. Despite the fact that having the highest average
income
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,
California
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 has a lot more poverty than the others.
People
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 under the age of 18
accounts
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 for over a quarter in
Utah
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, which is far higher than the figures for
California
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 and
Florida
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, making up 17% and 16% respectively.
Furthermore
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, the
proportion
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 of senior citizens in
Florida
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 stays at 23%, threefold higher than in
Utah
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, meanwhile,
California
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’s population of over 60s is 13%. As regards the remaining categories,
California
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’s average
income
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 is $23,000 per person, followed by $22,000 of
Florida
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 revenue. The percentage of residents who live in poverty in
California
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 and
Florida
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 is 16% and 12% respectively.
In contrast
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,
Utah
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 witnessed the lowest
proportion
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 of poor
people
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while
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 per capita
income
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 is only $17,000.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words income, proportion, california, utah, florida, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • disparities
  • correlate
  • socio-economic factors
  • demographic
  • economic prosperity
  • variance
  • indicators
  • social welfare programs
  • economic development
  • policy-making
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