Every year several languages die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In
this
contemporary society, some
languages
vanish every year.
As a result
, some
people
are of the opinion that
this
phenomenon makes our lives more convenient. I only partly endorse
this
view and will explain in detail my viewpoint
further
in the essay. Undoubtedly, there are some noteworthy reasons why some
people
think that disappearing a few tongues in society will make our lives easier. One of the representative reasons is that the efficiency of communication increases.
For example
, whenever we travel small sized country, we have to learn their language to talk with native
people
However
, if only a few lingua francas
such
as English and Spanish we can talk to each other and read their signs easily.
Moreover
, not only the tourism industry but
also
it has a good effect on overseas business. Because, nowadays, most countries increasing overseas business, so
people
who can have conversations without translators are required.
On the other hand
, there are some
people
who disagree with
this
view mentioned above. The most reasonable one is that we can not protect our history.
For instance
, if some tribe with a mother tongue is invaded by other
people
, we lose that tribe's history and culture and
then
, we will not find out anything about them.
Furthermore
, if some
languages
disappear,
people
who use vanished
languages
have to learn new
languages
and teach the next generation.
Last
but not least, some
people
lose their jobs
such
as linguistics and translators. In a nutshell, considering all the previously mentioned information, even though dying out of various
languages
has positive effects on the tourism industry ,
however
, I believe that language is one of the preservation things.
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Example:

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Linguistic diversity
  • Cultural heritage
  • Language extinction
  • Communication barrier
  • Linguistic imperialism
  • Endangered languages
  • Language revitalization
  • Monolingual
  • Multilingual
  • Language preservation
  • Homogenization
  • Language policy
  • Cultural assimilation
  • Intangible heritage
  • Indigenous languages
  • Globalization
  • Dialects
  • Localization
  • Language documentation
  • Digital archiving
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