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Are books more powerful than movies or otherwise? Advantages and disadvantages

The dilemma between
books
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 and movies is a never-ending war. Both of them have a huge impact on our personal and professional lives. Personally, I lean towards
books
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 because they offer boundless opportunities for imagination. Unlike TV series, where reliance on plot and visual effects can limit our creative freedom.
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 done by scientific universities
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 as Oxford and Cambridge reported that consuming too much time for watching movies is blocking our memory abilities.
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, reading all types of
books
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 helps to
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 the brain cells focused all over the time.
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, in
Japan
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Japan,
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 20% of young parents obstructed
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access to
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tv shows for their children up to 4th grade. Respectively, kids started to pay more attention
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 memorization of
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new information in their youth.
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 but not least, the privilege
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of consuming
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 information from
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new
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horizon
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 in our minds. Especially for individuals who are working in
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 industry, the sense of creativity is a crucial thing. Most of the readerships are granted
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a high abilities
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a high ability
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 to critical solving in
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real time
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. Ultimately,
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books
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 are more valuable when it comes to
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problem solving
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 and memorization skills.

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task achievement
Provide a balanced view by discussing both sides of the argument more comprehensively. While your preference for books is clear, devote more space to discussing the advantages and disadvantages of both movies and books to thoroughly address the prompt.
coherence cohesion
Organize your essay into clear paragraphs. Each paragraph should include one main idea supported by examples or evidence. Ensure a clear distinction between your introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion.
coherence cohesion
Enhance your coherence by linking ideas more smoothly. Use a wider range of linking words and phrases to guide the reader through your argument. This will create a more cohesive and fluid essay.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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