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Proper books vs E-books, what are the benefits and drawbacks of each category?

#books #e-books #category
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 war for decades among all story lovers between
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 and electronic
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. As long as both of them are qualified with a variety of advantages and disadvantages, I will outline my perspectives towards the
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. The individuals with access to the
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 are more likely to be flexible,
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 of portable and small physical size of them,
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 proper
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 are in high demand among individuals who are in love with the romantic atmosphere it provides. In the case of a long
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 physical
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 are not the proper decision,
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 it is less portable and convenient for travellers. In the same
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 can be presented to close friends and relatives that can be done with
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.
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,
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 affect the environment by producing too many greenhouse gases that could lead to global warming.
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, the main issue of
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 decade is deforestation caused by
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 of traditional
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. On top of that, only for four
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 at least one tree will be cut. On the whole,
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 believe that the decision to lean towards
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ebooks
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 will emphasise more benefits rather
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than proper
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 to our sustainability and
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Grammar
Review the usage of articles and plural forms to ensure grammatical accuracy.
Content
Add more specific examples to strengthen your arguments about the benefits and drawbacks of both ebooks and proper books.
Coherence Cohesion
Consider using connectors to improve the flow between ideas more smoothly.
Grammar
Pay attention to punctuation (e.g., using commas and periods correctly) to enhance readability.
Conclusion
In order to make your conclusion more impactful, you could consider restating the main advantages of ebooks in a summarized form.
Introduction
You introduced the topic well and clearly outlined your stance on preferring ebooks.
Content
Your essay shows a good understanding of the topic by discussing both sides, demonstrating a well-balanced view.
Coherence Cohesion
You successfully maintained a logical structure throughout your essay, making it easy to follow.

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