The bar chart below shows the popularity of well-known Instagram accounts in 2011 and 2021. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart displays information regarding the growth of fame in a 10-year period of popular Instagram influencers.
Overall
, the data reveals that in the year 2011, almost all of them had the same number of fans however
, Cristiano Ronaldo significantly rose in fame by the year 2021.
In the year 2011, Selena Gomez has the highest followers amounting to approximately 120 million
people. However
, other celebrities, such
as Cristiano Ronaldo and Ariana Grande, almost had the same number of subscribers both amassing more than 100 million
following
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and the rest have less than a hundred.
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hand, after 10 years, Renaldo tripled the number of his followers which peaked at about 320 Correct article usage
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Selena Gomez, despite a good standing in 2011, she
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million
in 2021. Whereas
, the Rock, Ariana Grande and Kylie Jenner rose similarly
and hit 250 million
Instagram followers at the end
of the period.Submitted by decxelnarjoyragas on
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