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The charts below show reasons for travel and the main issues for the travelling public in the US in 2009.

The charts below show reasons for travel and the main issues for the travelling public in the US in 2009.
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The chart shows the reasons why
people
travel
, and the diagram depicts the main issues
while
traveling
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 in the US in 2009. The most significant proportion of
traveling
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 is because of business trips, which was 49%. The number of
people
 who
go
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travel
 because of personal reasons and shopping was 19% and 16%, respectively. Both of percentage of
travel
 for visiting friends or relatives and for socializing are less than 15%. 36% of
people
 had problems with
travel
 price issues.
Furthermore
, 19% had problems with safety concerns.
According to
 data, 45% of
people
 had difficulties with transportation. The rate of problems with aggressive drivers and highway congestion accounted for 17% and 14%, respectively.
However
, the problem regarding
the
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access to public transport and space for pedestrians
recorded
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8
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% and 6% each.
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