The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade*-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries.

The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade*-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries.
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The tables show the amount of money spent on
Fairtrade
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coffee
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and
bananas
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in 2 different years in the
UK
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,
Switzerland
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, Denmark, Belgium and Sweden.
Overall
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, the
sales
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of
Fairtrade
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coffee
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rose in all five countries,
whereas
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only three out of five countries saw an increase. In fact,
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UK
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saw by far the highest levels of spending on both products. In 1999,
Switzerland
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had the highest
sales
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of
Fairtrade
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coffee
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, at 3
million
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,
while
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revenue from
Fairtrade
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bananas
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was the highest in
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UK
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the UK
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. By 2004,
sales
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of
Fairtrade
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coffee
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in the
UK
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had risen to 20
million
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, which is over three times higher than the
sales
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of
Switzerland
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in that year.
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, there were dramatic increases in
sales
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of
Fairtrade
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bananas
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in both
Switzerland
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and the
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UK.
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UK
with revenues rising by 32
million
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and 4.5
million
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respectively.
Sales
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of
two
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the two
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products were far lower in Denmark, Belgium and Sweden.
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A small
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increase in
sales
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of
Fairtrade
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coffee
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can be seen in all three countries, but their revenues were lower or equal to 2
million
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.
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, it is noticeable that
sales
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of
Fairtrade
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bananas
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in Sweden and Denmark actually fell.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words fairtrade, coffee, bananas, uk, switzerland, sales, million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fairtrade sales
  • significant growth
  • trends and patterns
  • market expansion
  • sustainable consumption
  • ethical products
  • consumer awareness
  • economic impact
  • percentage increase
  • market share
  • profit margins
  • trade initiatives
  • consumer behavior
  • retail figures
  • economic indicators
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