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The bar chart below shows the popularity of popular Instagram accounts in 2011 and 2021.

The bar chart below shows the popularity of popular Instagram accounts in 2011 and 2021.
The bar chart below shows the differences between the popularity of popular
Instagram
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 accounts in 2011 and 2021.
Overall
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, Selena Gomez had the highest number of
followers
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 on
Instagram
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 in 2018.
However
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, Cristiano Ronaldo and The Rock did not have much fun on social media in 2018. Meanwhile, Ariana Grande was more popular on
Instagram
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 than Kylie Jenner in 2018.
According to
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 the data, Selena Gomez had 130
million
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followers
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 on her page in 2018, at the same time Cristiano Ronaldo had 110
million
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followers
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 on
Instagram
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.
Nevertheless
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, Cristiano Ronaldo's number of
followers
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 on
Instagram
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 rose to 300
million
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 in 2021. Selene Gomez’s
followers
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 only rose to 240
million
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 on
Instagram
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 at one point. Ariana Grande had 120
million
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followers
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 on
Instagram
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 in 2018. The difference between The Rock and Kylie Jenner was 10
million
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followers
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 in 2018. In 2021,
however
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, they had the same
followers
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 on
Instagram
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words instagram, followers, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "differences" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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